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  • Ashley101.4
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    Come check out my book. It's called. Arias love for one
    The Boy Next Door
    The Boy Next Door
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    "Hi honey, this is Penny and her son Luke the new neighbors" as Luke turned around his face turned full on red "Hi" I say awkwardly "Hi I am Penny and this is Luke, Luke say hello" "UMM, Hi"...
  • Ashley101.4
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    Come check out my book and leave suggestions. It's called Arias Live for one.
    The roommate
    The roommate
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    Tory levvington needs a roommate. Not because she needs one, but because she's bored of being alone. When she finally finds the right roommate, things don't go as expected... "Tory." he whispered in...
    Ashley101.4
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    I mean
    Ashley101.4
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    Arias Love For One
    Rosieeck
    1 years ago
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    Its good but your very staccato with your sentences. You should try to add detail behind them. And add paragraphs it makes it seem more appealing and the details will make the reader more interested instead that kind of made me read in a monotone and not very exciting. Maybe try other punctuation marks? Im not tryingto. Be mean im trying to help you be a better writer that you can be
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