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  • ArcticMyth
    3 years agoReply
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    Having Just finished the first chapter, it's off to a really good start! One suggestion though, I don't think 'Whelping' is the word you want in the second paragraph. Whelping is used for baby animals, usually. Pleading might be closer to what you wanted. Entreating might work too, but pleading sounds more natural then Entreating in my opinion. :P Either way, good start! ^_^
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    After months and months of serving the King, serving the queen. It was all just too much for one person, one female. A female, a wonderful, beautiful girl who has spent her entire life fighting for her...
    3 SECOND LUKE
    3 years ago
    @[ArcticMyth] Thank-you. I appreciate your criticism. I'll be sure to change that, tonight or tomorrow. Thanks again. =)
    ArcticMyth
    3 years ago
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    ^__^ Either way, I'm looking forward to the rest. :)
    3 SECOND LUKE
    3 years ago
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    @[ArcticMyth] Thanks, ^_^ and I'll be writing that tomorrow. I might even publish it tomorrow night! =P
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