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~~HETALIA~ ~ Preußen <3 Ze Awesome Prussia!!

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and who can live without cats??

  • Philomena
    3 years agoReply
    To the awesome Prussia! Since we know ur truly a country anymore, how did u not fade away??? Is it because u became micronation? Cuz i never want u to fade Gilbert!
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    Post in the comments questions for any Hetalia Country! It can include My OCs Reyna and Brianna {Central Italy and North Ireland}.
    Philomena
    3 years ago
    *not a nation Typo
    Reyna Veneziano
    3 years ago
    Be ready for Gil to almost cry just saying ~Reyna
  • Philomena
    3 years agoReply
    Question for Romano!!! (hetalia :3)

    "Why do you hate Germany so??"
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    It's just like on devian art when people ask an anime character questions and I draw it out :3 I do requests and questions. Usually these go like drawing a reply to a question :3 [people did like ask...
  • Philomena
    3 years agoReply
    This was one the ones that instantly caught my attention, (I admit, fan of dystopian fantasy novels... Divergent Forever!) You did describe it enough to where I could envision some of it, (Another reason it kept me reading.) Again, and sorry for reiterating, even though being the story with the most detail so far... You need more. I know it seems so tiring, but what always kept me going was this; imagine someone trying to make a movie of this story, reading it they can envision it, but it's different and not what you thought up. That movie won't be accurate, Imagine the frustration! So add small even seemingly insignificant details.
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    This story is about Lucy Commings. Her memories were erased. Deleted. Taken away. Meaning she can't remember anything about her life. She is assigned to a new family in Boston, New York so she can "start...
    Philomena
    3 years ago
    Mine is obviously Divergent, although in general they are interesting
    Philomena
    3 years ago
    Erudite definitely, with a mixture of Abnegation :) What about you?
  • Philomena
    3 years agoReply
    This seems...interesting, but at the same time, a bit cliche. Being in first person, I understand why her thoughts seem abrupt, but being a book, elaborate, what is she feeling on a deeper level, perhaps make it seem more emotional, or if she isn't that kind of person, add more details on why and how she is moving. And try other methods of writing, I've noticed you only write in first person, try third person. Or perhaps some omnipresent narrator, perhaps a story seems to lag and it's usually because the point of view doesn't work, broaden your experience. :)
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    "No!" I screamed franticly. "Please! You can't tell anyone! They'll take me away and run tests on me! You can't do this!" Syrena Daire is not your average human. In fact she's not...
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