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I joined to support my daughter on this site..to read and comment on her work. However, I have not only enjoyed her work but others too it has been great to see so many wonderful stories.

  • angelleyes
    4 years agoReply
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    I love that you have not been predictable with this piece of writing. The picture prompt makes you think love story and happy times but you have chosen something much more emotive.

    The opening few lines set the story well so the reader gets a bit of background as to what has happened and how the young man is struggling to come to terms with what has happened and that he realises he has a battle too, that it was not just his girlfriends battle.

    The imagery from the cherry blossom tree is wonderful and how you relate his girlfirends soul to making the blossom grow is very poignant.

    I think the only criticism I would have is that we do not know the girlfriends name. However, I am assuming you did not use her name as for Shane to name her would have been too painful.

    Otherwise good job ;-)
    My Immortal
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    It is the anniversary of the death of Shane's girlfriend; he and Lacey go to visit her at her grave. Sorry, I cannot provide any more information, it will give it away! Entry into the new picture competition!...
    Jodie Angell
    4 years ago
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    I didn't reveal the name because by killing herself, she took away her own identity. Thanks for the comment!<3
  • angelleyes
    5 years agoReply
    Jodie this is truly beautiful. The visuals you created are amazing. This was so good it made me cry. Really well written.
    My Heart Will Melt
    My Heart Will Melt
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    Sarah has been desperate to see Joe for a long time now. Now that she is at a party where he will be, she has the perfect opportunity to rekindle the flame between them. But something happens, beforehand....
    Jodie Angell
    5 years ago
    Thanks :) glad you liked it!
  • angelleyes
    5 years agoReply
    what can I say...wow, just wow. Jodie you did an awesome job the ending is epic! Your ability to create a picture in my mind has really improved, love this :)
    City of Souls
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    Can a city possibly have a negative, sinister legacy? London used to be a heartfelt city, until one person entered the streets of London, and turned everything to ice with the bitter chill of his soul....
  • angelleyes
    5 years agoReply
    Love love love this well done
    Cry, the Stars
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    (My first attempt at a YA science fiction (dystopian.) I have no idea where it is going. I guess we'll find out.) In a far distant future, the last survivors of the human race have fled their dying planet...
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