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2. SnowPotato_ - A Best Betrayal

First of all, the cover has a very nice theme to it- nothing too extreme, but it's honestly really pretty. The title and blurb give a very nice insight, without giving too much away.

 One mistake I picked up on was in the second or third chapter. Cat and Harry are talking about her, and she says that she went to bed at 'three at night'. I don't know how you would normally say it in your language, but we normally say it 'three in the morning'. That was a tiny thing that stood out to me. 

Apart from that, the structure is good, the flashbacks are integrated well and the characters are really good. I can't wait to see more! 

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