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15. Ripped - Capt. Alora Wiley (In Progress)





Jack the ripper is one of my favorite killers throughout history!


This is truly a new story for me. Never did I expect someone to write a story from the perspective of a Ripper victim! Congrats to you on originality love! 


1. One of the many things I liked about this was how not only do you write from the POV of the victim, but you also share interactions with the ripper himself! It's quite interesting to read how he simply does not think he's mad. When anyone who's sane can see he is. 


2. Another thing I loved was the ghost interactions. I can't wait to see what you do with this! No one has ever wrote about their character being able to touch a spirit before. It makes me think maybe Jack has a power no one knows about. Or that Rose is possibly still alive, but no one knows because of the time period and lack of information. He could kill her again? This truly is different. I mean, she's dead. She can't really be killed again. But could he have the power to send her back from whence she came?


 Someone has gotten MUCH better with her writing. You should feel so proud my love! I can't wait to see how the story ends. I hope you receive some recognition for this work of art in the competition! <3



Edit: 12/8/15

The author has gone through and edited out all mistakes I found prior to this update. I have deleted them from this review as they are no longer a problem.

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