31. Harry Potter and the Secret Monster
Title: Harry Potter and the Secret Monster
Author: Watch Nimbus.171
Genre: Fanfiction-Harry Potter Fanfiction
The paragraph at the beginning is beautiful. I love the personification and similes especially! It really paints an amazing picture in your mind.
Meera Sharma- A young girl
Sheila- an old woman
Why You Should Read It:
The description is powerful and fantastic. Although there are only two characters, it seems interesting. You need to update!
I would get rid of the picture. Your description is powerful and paints a picture anyway, there is no need for an addition! It also replaces the power of the imagination and the picture it created with a solid image.
Link to Movella: http://www.movellas.com/story/201407121019174676-harry-potter-and-the-secret-monster
Link to Author: http://www.movellas.com/user/watch.nimbus