Writer's Review [Closed]

This movella is all about finding that perfect movella for you and helping other Movellas get noticed! I will give constructive criticism and suggestions. Also shout outs and other things will be given. Author of the week. Cover design competitions. Movella of the week. And much, much more. Competitions will be held when enough people have favorited the movella. Each movella will be graded 1-10 in the following categories: Cover: Title matching story: Blurb: Plot and story: Grammar and spelling: How to get noticed is in the first chapter. Fill out the form and comment when done. Simple. ❤️⚾️❤️SamiSoftball

7Likes
30Comments
747Views
AA

2. This is Us

This is Us

By: FiercePrincessAlli

I really like this! It was a good short read and I understand that it is a prequel for "Reliving the Past" a story I never read (yet). I like the way you give the reader a good idea of the characters' personality and background. I also like Jaylon's character and the way he said, "You forgot to tell her I said hi." That was funny.

In chapter one, second paragraph, it seems like the mother says "I just" a lot and I think less of that would be more effective. Idk, maybe it's just me.

In the third paragraph you say, "belonging" when it should be "belongings". There were a few other minor things that I would possibly revise but, again probably just me.

•COVER: 10/10

Idk if you designed it yourself but I love it! I like the colors and the font, especially. The people are also good adds. All together it was very effective!

•TITLE MATCHING STORY: 7/10

It never said much about "This is Us" and maybe you can add that into your story. So it would be better if you made a connection, like a character actually saying the title.

•BLURB: 7.5/10

The blurb is relatively accurate but I feel it could use a little extra to make you want to read the story especially if the reader didn't read RtP.

•PLOT AND STORY: 8.5/10

The idea of college and the boyfriend is good. I think if I read "Reliving the Past" it would be better but I haven't. You need to think about the audience that hasn't read the book too.

•GRAMMAR AND SPELLING: 8/10

There were a few mistakes but all together pretty good!

•FINAL RATING: 8.2/10👍

Good job, FiercePrincessAlli!!!

Thx for being the first customer to "Writer's Review"!!!

❤️⚾️❤️SamiSoftball

Join MovellasFind out what all the buzz is about. Join now to start sharing your creativity and passion
Loading ...