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2. "Defenders of Metoa: Book One" Review

 

Book: Defenders of Metoa 'Book One'

Author: Rihae Nufel

Genre: Fantasy

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I have to say, this is really interesting. I really like where this is going, and quoting Radiance Radio, "You should totally send it to a publishing company. If it was published, guess who's gonna be fighting for the first copy? (XD)" 

At the beginning, it was a little confusing who was who, but then it explained it in the 5th chapter, so I can't really complain. There were a few errors, but other than that, I thought it was, again, interesting. I can't wait for you to finish!

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At the first paragraph in Chapter Four: Beginning of a Journey, I was a bit confused reading the sentence, "As the dust from Kaitos end began to bury Jing closed his eyes gently and smiled in accomplishment." I'm not sure if you meant to say "As the dust from Kaitos end began to bury Jing, he closed his eyes gently and smiled in accomplishment" or something else? 

On Chapter 5, there was this place, where Tysuka is talking to Erin, and Tysuka said, " 'So the Guardian of Metoa is to cocky to say hey to a friend every once in a while?' " The correct to/two/too/2 is "too." 

There weren't a lot of errors left, so I'm gonna move on. ^-^

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(P.S. SORRY IF I'M PISSING YOU OFF WITH MY ANNOYING CRITIC SELF! IF I SAY SOMETHING BAD, FEEL FREE TO SPAM ME WITH BAD LANGUAGE, I WILL PROBABLY DESERVE IT!)

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In conclusion, the movella was well written, had few errors, and had a good plot. So good job, Rihae Nufel, you clearly have great potential for an author! ^-^

 

-TheCrazyMustachio

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