Diana, is the story of the girl in the song "Diana" by One Direction. It about Diana being bullied, and abused. She fall's for a member of the biggest boy band in the world, but I won't say who.
This is not my favorite story. It is a combination of several overused plots. Abuse, Bullying, Randomly Bumping into a member of 1D on the street. (I happen to use that one in one of mine.) and Diana, the girl from the song.
Diana is an ok story, if it's the kind of thing that you like to read, and it's not mine. There were a few things that bothered me. There were spelling errors throughout, though I do understand because I am dyslexic, and spelling is not my strong suit. I was happy to see that you started a new line when someone else started to speak. That is one of my pet peeves! I did get confused during text msg scenes, or talking on the phone. With phone conversations I would like it to be more dialogue, like normal. Other than that it was fine. Oooh, I did get kind of confused during the 20Q scene at the end. I had to read it 3 times to figure out who was asking the other what.
Punctuation/ Grammar: 6