Hope is a so far, a tear jerker movella. I am on the edge of my seat, waiting to see what happens to Jess and Crystal. One of the things you coulf do better, is trying to make chapters a bit longer, and making things a bit more clear, like about the kidnapper, and the other kidnapped kids, but I know you're not finished yet.
Overall, this movella is quite a great movella.
Ps, sorry if I was a bit harsh.