(Temporarily closed... come back soon.) In Covers, I not only give covers to aspiring authors, but constructive criticism (unless requested against) to make the Movella great! Enjoy!

-K. E. Kamiko


12. Patience (by SomeGirl13)

Hey SomeGirl! I like your story- a lot! Just one thing... don't timelapse so much. Start when she's already moved in and exploring, then have a flashback, like "I soared through the wilderness, glad to be free. My wings flapped and I got a nice breath of air... it was nice to be all unpacked, with nothing but a new wood to explore..." or something. Also, the whole "X's across the screen to indicate a timelapse" is kinda- well, amateur.

Aside from that, it's perfect! I can't wait to read more.

Hope you like the cover. Remember, if you decide to use it, credit me and put in a nice word in the comments. Thanks, love!

And I'm REALLY sorry I screwed up the name the first time... I was hungry and you know what they say about that... "You're not you when you're hungry!" All fixed now. Enjoy!

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