Proud

by
guineapiglovingirl
  • Published:
    6 Aug 12
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Blurb Kate is desperate to make her mum proud before it is to late...

Plot keywords:
love,  hate,  self,  cancer
Category:
Realism
Approx 1 minutes to read

Proud

1. Diagnosis

We were sitting on the sofa in the living room when she came in, I had no idea where she had been that whole day but it seemed that my dad and older sister knew and they were struggling to tell me, as soon as she entered everyone turned to look at me. I felt so vulnerable under the gaze of 6 startlingly blue eyes. I turned and returned the stares I knew something was up. Tears were filling everyone's eyes. Were they sending me away because I was to violent and they didn't like me? I couldn't bear it any longer as I saw tears on everones' faces. I had to know what had happened and eventually mum spurted it out after what felt like hours of sitting there waiting for the news.

 ''I have been diagnosed with cancer.''

 

Comments (4)

  • xxJenJenxxI will post another comment later but I've found something that doesn't make sense: I couldn't bear it any longer ad I saw water my sister's collar.
    xxJenJenxxPlease write more it's really left on a sad cliffhanger! The only thing I would suggest would be maybe slow down a little but still keep the dramatic feel. Try to build it up really impressively to engage the final shock! If you have time please could you read my movella: the ink of my legacy, thanks x
    guineapiglovingirlI meant that she had been crying earlier of corse I will check out yours and thanks for commenting(sorry I took so long to reply I went on holliday and things).
  • JustOneDirectionerlove it please check out my movellas
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