The Lost One

by
Emily Jane Heatley
  • Published:
    5 Aug 12
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Blurb Tina and Mia are best friends and they decide to go and explore the Manor House. What they discover will be with them forever....
Approx 2 minutes to read


The Lost One

1. The Beginning

"Should we sneak into The Manor house Mia? I'm bored and it will be fun"

"I'm not sure, we don't want to get found out"

"Oh go on, you are no fun" says Tina in an annoying tone.

" Fine then but if we get found out, I am blaming you" 

" Okay, lets go"

" But first Mia, we need to pack stuff"

"Like what?"

" Like... Oh I know! A flash light. We will need it because it is going to be dark. No one lives in the house"

"Fine. Is this Manor haunted by any chance?" Mia says in a frightened tone.

"No! of course not. Don't be silly but even if it is they won't harm us. Trust me."

"Okay, lets go then. Oh don't forget to take the camera"

"I have it in my bag. Okay lets go"

The two girls enter the Manor House which is only 10 minutes away. They walk into the house which is silent. The floor creaks as they make their way into the living room. 

" Why doesn't anyone live in the house anymore Tina?"

" I don't know but my Mum said no one has lived in the house since the 70's"

"That's a long time. Why haven't they demolished the Manor?"

" I don't know, Okay enough with the questions, lets go and explore"

The two girls explore the enter Manor but as soon as they open the front door to go back home, they hear a bang and mumbling noises.

"What was that?! whispers Tina who is starting to get a little bit freaked out.

"Let's go and find out"

The two girls go into the room where they heard the bang.

"Look Tina, the mirror has fell"

"That is probably because it is old Mia. We best get back."

"Yeah, we better had."

The two girls are about to leave when Mia feels a hand on her shoulder....

 

 

 

 

 

Comments (2)

  • Little Miss NightlockThis is good! A great cliff-hanger at the end of chapter one. If I had to give some constructive critisism, I'd say you need more narration, because so far, it''s pretty much all dialouge! But it's still good!
    If you have time could you possibly check out my new movella, Electi? I've been planning it since before April, and although I'm only on chapter 3, I'm hoping to add more chapters soon! Comments, and maybe even likes and favourites if you really like it, would be much appreciated! Thanks in advance, and once again,your movella is great!
    Link to Electi- movellas.com/en/book/read/20120804132018..
    Emily Jane HeatleyThank you :) I will work on it some more. Yeah I will have a loom at it :) x
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