Slim Pickings

by
Kathryn
  • Published:
    24 Jun 12
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Blurb Darcy is a normal popular high school student who attends Daugherty High. She dreams of being a professional cheerleader but in order for her to become that her couch tells her that she needs to control her diet and cut down. After weeks of trying but not getting anywhere, Darcy decides to change her diet extremely. She begins starving herself to be able to attend the national champion ships. Her best friend Grace starts to notice the changes in Darcy at school and so does her sister Brooke but will they be able to stop Darcy’s extreme eating habits or will it end terrible for everyone?
Approx 26 minutes to read


Slim Pickings

5. My Time With Zac

 

Darcy dabbed a small amount of concealer onto her skin then slipped into a white body hugging jumpsuit. She checked herself out in the mirror. Perfect. A chunky mustard coloured cardigan and a gold belt was all she needed to complete her outfit. Darcy couldn’t wait for the second day of school for two simple reasons 1. She found out today whether she made the cheerleading team or not and 2. She would see Zac again.

The spring sun shone through the apple green leaves as dad drove Darcy and Brooke to the school gates where Grace stood leaning against the wall, a slim guy flirting with her.

Darcy cleared her throat. Grace pulled herself away from the older boy who looked disappointed to see her go. Darcy couldn’t believe Grace sometimes. Only the second day and she’s already chatting up guys that are way out of her league. ‘How are you today?’ Darcy asked her as she gave her a gentle hug. The girls walked into the world of high school once again just as the bell sounded for their first class.

Darcy’s P.O.V

Fifty-two painful minutes of maths with a super-boring teacher, Miss Drew. At least I had Zac to keep me company. ‘ So did you make it onto the team then?’ He asked as we copied the questions written on the board into our jotters.

‘Not sure yet, hopefully because it’s one of my favourite things.’ I replied. ‘How did you know anyway?’

‘I saw you there yesterday when I was at football trials.’

I rested my head on the palm of my hand and asked, ‘did they go well?’

‘ Ok, I suppose. I’m not that bothered if I don’t get in, at least I tried,’ Zac replied with a smile.

He was gorgeous like he should be a model for Vogue. His black hair had a little more volume in it and his eyes looked at me with a look of kindness. Our eyes met once again and that’s when I knew we had a special connection with each other.

‘You look really pretty today,’ he said studying my jumpsuit.

You’re looking hot today, I thought. I wanted to say it so badly but I knew I shouldn’t.

‘Thanks, you look pretty too.’

We both burst out laughing to the point when everyone in the class was staring at us.

 

‘What do you mean he complimented you?’ Grace asked I picked at my sandwich.

‘Shhh,’ I whispered analysing the room in case anyone had over heard our conversation. ‘It doesn’t mean that much anyway-‘

A petite girl with long braided hair and a cute face interrupted us. She gave us a beaming smile that showed pearl white teeth.

 ‘Are you Darcy?’ She asked turning to me.

I nodded in reply. How did she know my name?

‘Coach Bradshaw would like to see you in the practise room.’ She said then turned on her heel and walked of to join a large group of girls standing at the doorway.

My palms suddenly turned clammy. This was it.

 

Comments (17)

  • J.K. PanesarThis is really good. I think that keeping it to one person tense will make it better, instead of swapping from third to first. However it does add to the effect of your story which I like because this is a real life everyday thing that goes on, but not many choose to write about it and I am glad you did so. You could also do with some more detail. I feel like the chapters are ending too quickly for me. I needed to read more and more and more. I would love to read more of this, so get writing another chapter.
    KathrynThank you J.K.! I'm keeping to Darcy's point of view from now because I want you to feel the pain like she is :D I wanted to make sure that you knew about the town that she lives in because it will become important later on :D As for the chapters, I like to leave them on a kind of small cliffhanger, so you will come back and read more. The detail is going to go much more deeper as we progress :D I'll be writing another chapter soon, thank you once again :D
  • Peace & DonutsReally good new chapters I've forgot to read this for a while sorry :) please can u read my poem the dress if u have time?? Thanks
    KathrynThank you Peace & Donuts! It's ok, I need to upload new chapters so check it out again soon. I would love too, thanks again :)
  • Bells HunterThis is very good, and it's nice that you chose to write about anorexia as it's a problem nowadays.
    Maybe you should stick to one type of person, instead of changing from third to first all the time :) I will be looking for more, so keep writing :)
    Liked.
    Would you mind reading my short poem, Attempts of Poetry? It owuld mean a lot if you left feedback, as I would love to improve my writing. Thanks :)
    KathrynThank you bells, it means a lot that you checked my movellas out, thank you for the constructive criticism. I would love to read your poetry, and again thank you! :)
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