The School Of Bullies!

by
XxJessxX
  • Published:
    16 May 12
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Blurb The story, of a young girl who is 8 years old. She has recently moved house since her Mum and Father split up from each other. Separating Mel who is the 8 year old girl from her one and only Father. Mel also has to move school, a heart breaking moment while saying good-bye to her old friends forever... As you follow Mel's life at her new school, all she wants is a better life, she wish's everything is back to normal...
Approx 40 minutes to read


The School Of Bullies!

1. Mel & Joey <3!

It was an early windy morning. Blue fluffy birds were tweeting as their feathers got carried by the warm winds. Inside the lovely warm home lived a girl called Mel. Her mother recently went shopping before leaving behind her keys. Mel was a eight year old girl who loved to explore. Her friends were almost everyone in her grade. Waiting down stairs for Mel was Joey. He was Mel's older brother who was always looking out for her. No matter what the consequences were. He never let her down. As the fluffy white clouds shadowed over their home. Casting a large shadow of Mel's figure on the dusty gravel. It was almost time for school. Joey had already shouted from down stairs. "Mel, come on sis" mum was still out shopping for groceries. Their father was busy fishing. "Mel, do you want me to say goodbye for you?" asked Joey. Mel didn't understand. Joey has never asked that question before. It startled Mel as she continued to brush her blonde shiny hair.

"Joey will you give me a hand please" replied Mel while using her soft angel voice. Joey was always loving and caring to his younger sister. Mel loved him as far as Joey understood. "I'll come help you Mel" shouted Joey. As Mel was finishing brushing her lovely blonde hair. Joey burst through the door to help Mel. This made Mel jump a little. However inside she felt happy to see him. Joey could see on her younger sister's soft face that he made her jump. "I'm sorry sis didn't mean to make you jump..." whispered Joey. As Mel was getting down from her stool that she uses to reach the mirror. "Careful sis you might fall" Joey said with his deeper voice. Mel always thought that maybe Joey is too loving and caring. She always thinks that he smothers her all the time. Mel wished that Joey would let her do things by her self. Since she wanted to show her beautiful mother that she is growing up.

Joey backed off from Mel as he could see that his sister was getting annoyed. "I'm sorry again..." Joey whispered while walking away with his head down. As Joey moved towards his tidy bedroom with blue clear tears rolling down his face. The tears elapsed Joey's lips as they dripped from his chin to his bedroom floor. Mel felt sorry for Joey. She didn't mean to offend him in anyway. Before Mel decided to do what was right she started to brush her teeth. The phone rang from downstairs. Joey was too busy crying. He couldn't hear the loud ring tone on his father's phone. Mel managed to hear a quiet almost silent sound. Since Mel loved to explore she went down stairs after throwing the toothbrush on the floor in a hurry. The phone was almost about to cut off as Mel grabbed the phone with her soft little hands. "Hello?" replied Mel. "Can you please come over here Mel". Mel thought she recognised the voice on the other side of the phone. It was Lilly.

Her best friend from her school. Mel whispered back to Lilly on the phone so it wouldn't alert Joey. "Lilly, what's happened?". Lilly sounded grumpy with a bit of fear putting her voice off track. "Mmum, is having some issues". Mel could tell by the sound of Lilly's voice that she weren't joking. She could however tell that she was shaking with fear. "I'll ask if I can come over okay Lilly?" replied Mel with her soft whispers. As the sun began to blaze out of the clouds forming heat inside of Mel's home. It was obvious that Mel should ask her brother. He would never let her down. Joey was still blubbering with tears causing puddles on the bed room carpet. "Joey!" shouted Mel with fear in her mind. It may of been too late to help her best friend. Joey was lying at an angle with a pillow pressed against his face. It was quite an impact on Mel. Since she has never seen him like this before. Looking at Joey she could tell that he needed her more than Lilly needed Mel...

 

Comments (22)

  • Diego<3good use of description but it does seem a bit rushed in places like you couldn't wait to get the idea out of your head xD good though
    XxJessxXThanks =)
    sorry it's because my idea's are flooding xD
  • A Candid ConfinementIt feels as though you are trying to pull it off in a single try, but you have really good ideas, just capitalize on them and you will end up winning. Will you plz read my entry"the swaggers of a unheavenly place" and please comment
    XxJessxXSure why not =)
    I will be updating the chapters daily
    If it's all perfect looking to me
    I will leave it, Thanks for your kind words btw x <3
  • XxJessxXAdam is that better? I read through most of the chapters. However I got my younger brother to do a better check since I need tablets for my head ache...
    sorry =(
    XxJessxXThanks Adam, I'll take that to notice x
  • angelleyesSome good ideas here but it's all a bit frantic and rushed. The competition has a long time to run therefore don't feel you have to post everything really quickly. Take you time to build your storyline. Also proofread before you post as there are some obvious mistake with grammar and sentence structure which you should have picked up if you went over it. The problem I found as a reader is its all to frenetic and did not hold my interest because I felt it was noticeable that care to check it over had not been taken.
    XxJessxXThanks and I am going to go through it tomorrow since my
    head hurts...
    =(
  • VeritasJess..... count to ten slowly while you breathe in through your nose and exhale through your mouth in a calm circular motion... relax and feel you body becoming numb. Good, now you're relaxed maybe you can let people read this nice and calmly without you nearly spamming their heads off :P You've posted four rather hectic comments on your story within 1 hour! Don't worry! This comp is running for nearly two months... people WILL discover this story ;)
    XxJessxXThanks Veritas =)
    VeritasI'm just worried about exploding heads you know ;)
    XxJessxXMe explode my head ha ha - BOOM -
    errrr...
    veritas, could you hand me a new head :P LEGO will do =P
    Veritas: I hate to tell you I told you so, but I told u so
    Me: -.-
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