KvindeDenmarkMedlem siden 15 aug. 14Last online 3 years ago

  • KMNYGYM
    3 years agoSvar
    You certainly have a conflict here, but besides that I am missing the other plot characteristics like point of no return, quest and happy ending. Also, a bit more proof-reading would have been nice.
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    its is a story about a dwarf who are going to travel around in other worlds than his own world, the dwarf world.
  • KMNYGYM
    3 years agoSvar
    This is a great and exciting fantasy story, which is also very well written. It is also clear that you follow the structure and plot of a fantasy story. Well done
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