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A Leap Of Faith

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MoonAvis
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  • Published:
    5 Feb 13
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Blurb A poem written by a girl to her dead lover who claims insanity at the loss of him and prepares to join him.
Plot keywords:
love, insanity, death, reunited
Category:
Poetry
Rating:
Approx 1 minutes to read


A Leap Of Faith

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1. A Leap Of Faith

I miss your stroke of affection

You gave me when I was hurt,

I miss your gentle gazes

To soothe me back to comfort.

 

I ache for the time when your

Hand was forever in mine,

The warm rush I felt through

When we were intertwined.

 

I miss the scent of lavender

That came from your wet hair,

As you came closer to kiss me-

You said you’d always be there.

 

All you gave me were fake vows,

All you spoke were lies,

You didn’t realize you’d made with me

So many unspoken ties.

 

For you hadn’t warned what was forgone

Didn’t give me a chance to sigh,

Too late I found out what you hadn’t said

Was that you’ll say goodbye.

 

I am going mad and totally insane,

I’ve completely lost my glam,

Now you see what you have done to me,

I don’t know who I am.

 

No! I won’t seek for another love,

Another chance to weep,

I’m coming to you high above heavens

Where together we shall leap.

 

 

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  • Euna MarieI don't like it...

    I LOVE IT!!!!! I ABSOLUTELY LOVE IT!!! I really really love how you put the poem into the flow of a story! It really gives the reader the feel of the girl's emotions and troubles and fights. If this is in a poetry competition, this definitely has a fighting chance of winning, like, like being in the finals, then, then winning!!!! XD Liked and faved it!
    MoonAvisWoah thank you! That just gave me a huge boost of confidence! :D Actually, I have entered this entry in a poetry competition called 'Stanza And Deliver' and I don't know if I will even place as a runner-up, let alone a winner! But thanks again. I am sorry if I sound patronizing at all, but if you need me to read something of yours, I will do it with joy. Just ask. :D
    Euna MarieWell, if you have spare time you could read one of my movellas called In The Eye Of The Storm. :) Just saying...XD Thanks if you will! and No, no, you didn't sound patronising at all, you sounded realistic, making sure that you're not bringing your hopes too high up, and I admire that.
    MoonAvisYes, I will definitely read it, you're welcome. XD Why, thank you! Yeah, it's really important because last time I got so excited and over-confident, but in the end I didn't see my name anywhere and got super upset. But I am pretty ready this time.
  • LV_musicgirlTHIS IS AWESOME!!!!!!!!!!!!! I absolutely loved it! Brilliant! :D
    MoonAvisAwh Thank you so much for taking your time to read my work LV_musicgirl! It means the world to me :D
  • DoodleArtiste Wow.....just wow.....This is really good. It's really emotive and the rhymes are quite god.
    MoonAvisThank you so much for your wonderful compliments! :D I've read your 'Songs' and they are just so good!
  • IceCreamGirlThis is really good.
    It shows great emotion and depth, as said below, and flows really well. The rhyming works great as well, and I like how it starts off like a love poem, but then gets angrier.
    I'd take out a few of the commas between lines, as some are just sentences including the next line. I'd also try to make the beat a bit better; as some lines feel a bit too long and others too short. Just add in some adjectives or take out some words, reading it aloud can help.
    But then again, I don't know much about poetry XD
    Liked and faved, great poetry!
    MoonAvisThank you so so so so so so much ICG! :D Actually there were no commas at first, but then I looked up a few poems(including yours) and they all had punctuations, so just added a few commas here and there! ;D But then, I added too many, so yes, I will remove some and adjust the length of the verses when I get the time. :D Thanks for the feedback!
  • xxJenJenxxWow...I don't know what to say...If I were to list everything I loved about this my comment would be the size of a novel!
    MoonAvisOh thank you bunches Jen! :'D That has to be the nicest comment I've ever received! Haha is it that good?
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