Unfinished song

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Snapshot
  • Published:
    31 Aug 12
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Blurb
Plot keywords:
love, crush
Category:
Poetry
Rating:
Approx 1 minutes to read


Unfinished song

1. Flying

 

Butterflies in my belly. Making my knees feel like jelly.
Making me smile for no reason. I didn't know it was the hunting season.  
Oh oh....  

But your name in my head makes my heart beat like a thousand raindrops on an Autumn day.
And your face in my eyes makes my body like a flying bird at sunset over a bay.  

I fly around
I fly all over the town
It seems there is no end
But I don't care, I'm not afraid at all
'Cause if you catch me, I wouldn't mind to fall  

Whisper my name in my ear. Hold me close so I'll have no fear.
Close your eyes, what do you feel? Tell me now if this is real.  

Oh oh...  

I spin around 
I spin again and again
It seems there is no end
But I don't care, I'm not afraid at all
'Cause if you catch me, I wouldn't mind to fall  

 

Comments (2)

  • colbyjis it a song or a poem? I ile the similes and metefores great in that concept. I know from writing myself the lines are really long and hard to flow together. I like the repetative line "Cause if you catch me, I wouldnt mide to fall" it has a strong "bonded" rythem so it is a good represanative line! I think the 1st line is kinda childish and sets in off into a different beat and flow which imbalences the whole appomanyment. I like the 2 lines started with whisper because they go in a nice compatable flow and have innatailly soothing lyrics! :) Would you check out my movella Changes?
  • DinakarBeautiful poem ,I liked it
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