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The Girl with One Eye

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Calliope In Wonderland
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    22 Sep 12
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Blurb DO NOT READ THIS MOVELLA.... READ MY REVISED VERSION (WHICH IS FOR A COMPETITION) IT IS CALLED THE GIRL WITH ONE EYE (REVISED).... SURPRISE SURPRISE. OK, B-BYE. TA-TA. TOODLE-OO. SEE YOU LATER ALLIGATER. IN A WHILE CROCODILE. NOT TOO SOON BABOON xoxoxoxoxoxoxo
Plot keywords:
florence, the, machine, and
Category:
Fantasy
Rating:
Approx 30 minutes to read


The Girl with One Eye

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1. Prologue- the song

She told me not to step on the cracks

I told her not to fuss and relax

Pretty little face stopped me in my tracks

But now she sleeps with one eye open

 

That's the price she'll pay I took a knife and cut out her eye I took it home and watched it wither and die

Well, she's lucky that I didn't slip her a smile

That's why she sleeps with one eye open

That's the price she'll pay

 

I said, hey, girl with one eye

Get your filthy fingers out of my pie

I said, hey, girl with one eye

I'll cut your little heart out cause you made me cry

 

I slipped my hand under her skirt I said don't worry, it's not gonna hurt

Oh, my reputation's kinda clouded with dirt

That's why you sleep with one eye open

But that's the price you pay

 

I said, hey, girl with one eye

Get your filthy fingers out of my pie

I said, hey, girl with one eye

I'll cut your little heart out cause you made me cry

 

You made me cry

You made me cry

You made me cry

 

I said, hey, girl with one eye

Get your filthy fingers out of my pie

I said, girl with one eye

Get your filthy fingers out my pie

I said, hey, girl with one eye

Get your filthy fingers out of my pie

 

I said, hey, girl with one eye

I'll cut your little heart out cause you made me cry

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  • °°°Chloe<3°°°u have skills for writing btw :D
  • °°°Chloe<3°°°WHT HAPPENED :O
    Calliope In WonderlandHehe! Guess..... *annoying mysterious voice*
  • Ilse V RensburgI love dark stories and this is definitely one of them! Good job, I enjoyed this :)
  • Bells HunterThis is a dark piece, swirling with jealousy and rage. I'm guessing the snap means that Jane killed herself.
    It was amazing, loved it all the way through, and I absolutely love Girl With One Eye by Florence + The Machine.
    Great creativity, love it.
    As for CC, you did switch to first person perspective a few times, instead of sticking to the third person.
    :D
    Calliope In WonderlandArrrp!
    THE Bells Hunter has commented on one of my movellas! Thank you so much for reading it. Yes the song is amazeballs. Sequel is in the draftsbox, but it needs work so...
  • Annie.GVery captivating writing! I couldn't stop reading and I had such a hunger for your dark, dark story! Goodness me, I'm going to be haunted now! I like your characters and the are pretty original. I think the text talk element is characteristic and adds even more to this. Just two points:
    I don't know if you agree, but an awful lot of people keep blacking out?! I think you use this maybe one or two times too many and it does get a bit repetitive! :P
    Also, in a few places the narrative is in first person. I'm guessing you originally wrote this in first person or something, because in the later chapter, every now and then you say things like 'Annie looked at me' and 'I said...' they just need fixing.
    Very great stuff I'm looking forwards (or not!) to the ending... :D
    Calliope In WonderlandThank you so much for the cc! Yes I started slipping off into first person a few times, and aye there are three blackouts. Thanks again Annie. Im working on a shorter sequel rght now...
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