Immortal Love

by
Sagarika
  • Published:
    11 Aug 12
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Blurb Well it will be really fun reading this poem if you are in love.
Plot keywords:
love
Category:
Poetry
Rating:
Approx 1 minutes to read


Immortal Love

1. lOVE!!!!!!!

The very next moment, I saw our face

My life turned on to a complicated phase.

Towards you I am attracted,

And for always distracted.

You are the one about whom i often think,

And when my eyes are on you, they hardly blink.

About you, i fantasize

And will do anything for you, at any price.

Even if u act sarcastic,

For me you are just fantastic!

If i talk about you, well there will be extravagant praises

And the praises will last even after ages.

Because for me you are forever going to be the same

And to be with you all my life is my one and only aim.

For your comforts,

I will put all my efforts.

And will go beyond my limit,

Without caring about myself, NOT EVEN A BIT!

Even if from me,  you want to be evaded

I still wont lose hope and will try to get you persuaded

Your voice is so appealing

It carries a handful of feelings.

From every hurdle, I will get through

Hence one fine day, I WILL BE WITH YOU!

 

 

Comments (10)

  • ToryBThis poem shows the extent of true love. I like it when you put some of the words in capital letters to get the point across to and the ryming is great! However you need to perhaps just briefly scan through it and make sure all your i s are capitals (I) and you have no spellings. Overall its great!
    ToryB If you have time could you read my movella 'Two decaf coffees and two extra-large chocolate doughnuts' I'd really appreciate it! Thanks!
    SagarikaThank you very much :).....I willl work on the capital i's :)...
    and yeah sure i would love to read yours :)
  • Genny LawrenceVery nice, and I like how you put rhymes in. Could you check out my entry for the poetry comp 'Fixed to be Broken'? Thanks
    Sagarikathanks! and ya sure!
  • DinakarBeautifully expressed the feelings of a persistent love
  • ChetnaAwesome, love the last line, the persistent rhymes (which you always manage brilliantly) and the emotion shines through. So well done! Just remember to capitalise the 'i's and that's the only fault I can find :P Everything else is perfect ;D This is my new favourite of all your poems yet, Sago :) xx
    ChetnaPS I wrote a poem too! Lol, got inspired by you, but mine doesn't rhyme...so I don't know if you'll like it. Check it out please? It's called the Sleeping Beauty :D
    Sagarikahey thanks a lot and ya will work on the capitalization :P
    k let me go through your poem since you are inspired by me!! :P
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