Two minds, one soul

by
Little miss punk
  • Published:
    19 Jul 12
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Blurb You don't chose a dragon a dragon choses you and once you have been chosen your are bound to your dragon for life. Only the witches who are still one with the old ways are chosen. They came from a distant world and they have taken over; the only ones who can stop then are the dragon riders so they belive if they find out why they are chosen they can. Morgan is one of those witches and one night she is and a friend are both taken. One night they try to make their escape but things don't go to plan.
Approx 30 minutes to read


Two minds, one soul

4. A Friend

 

I wake up but this time I'm lying on a freezing cold metal table and I can feel thick leather straps on my arms and on my legs. I struggle but it is no use and it burns the skin on my leg, I have to keep calm so I take deep even breaths and I feel a little better. I open my eyes and I'm in the laboratry and I'm pinned to the table and who know whats going to happen next dissection.

 

I look around the room and the first thing I spot is this cute guy(I don't know why I notice it but I do); he has long curly brown hair and kind eyes, he is arguing with two guys about twice his size. It looks like he's won this argument and they go to the back of the room but it makes that makes me feel worse.I'm not stupid so as kind as any of there eyes are except Gabe and Xaiver but I don't think they count because I know Gabe and Xaiver is trapped here too.

 

He smiles at me and it puts me in mind of an evil scientist smiling at his experiment but I'm to paranoid because when I look again he look younger and less evil. I feel my heart beat faster as he walk towards me because they are the reason there aren't many dragon riders. They have wanted to understand them so they do all sorts of test and I can't imagine any of them are dead.

 

"I hate it when they do that; I feel like an evil scientist" he says to me.

"Aw, we wouldn't want the evil scientist to feel bad and forget to rip his victims heart out" I say sarcasticly.

"Thats a bit harsh don't you think, even Xaiver hummors me" he says.

"Why does he do that?" I say coodly.

"because I do this"

 

He comes closer to me and he bends down and he unbuckles the huge buckles of the leather straps on my arms and then he unbuckles the ones on my legs. There are red marks on the top of my arms and on the top of my legs; I rub the red marks and they sting a little. I sit up and I consider running but the big guys are standing near the door and I think its locked.

 

"I'm Kit by the way"he says in a friendly tone.

"Yeah and I'm none of you buisness" I snap.

"Just hummor me and I'll help you" he says and I think he might be telling the truth.

"Fine; Morgan so how" I say recluctantly.

"Haven't you wondered why there are guards here"

 

"No, why?"

"I' don't work for then, I'm a dragon rider; my dragon and he can control ice"

"Are you telling the truth; whats his name?"

"I'm telling the truth; his name is Gelum"

"How can you help us;can you get us a key?"

 

" They didn't give me one"

" Can you get one?" " It will take a few days"

" Really?"

"Yes know let me do this"

 

I sit there and I let him take all the blood and run all the test he need to do because my mind is running ahead of me to thought of freedom and fresh air. I feel a little dizzy so he must have taken more than I thought but I trust him because of the sadness in his voice when he spoke of his dragon, it wasn't the sort of emotion you can fake . I think he's finished so I see him pulls out a needl and I feel a slight pinch in my arm like a bee sting then everything goes black again.

 

 

Comments (3)

  • Inkball :DJust read the first chapter. A great start- you have explained the characters and setting very well. However, the dialogue is confusing- it would be much better if you actually said which character was saying what, and added some description of how they were saying it and how they were acting as they said it. For instance: "but it's dangerous," Bree said, an anxious look on her face. See? You also have a few grammar mistakes, but other than that, lovely start. And if you have time, can you take a read of my entry, The Lioness and the Squirrel? Thanks. :)
  • Elizabeth HaleI love the idea of a dragon choosing you, its kind of... sentimental.... if that is the right word. I do think that there is a lot of dialouge, which is a bit confusing, and it would be helpfulto start out knowing your characters, which can be expressed through dialouge. Run through the piece and check over for the grammatical issues, including 'boy friend'. Is that a boyfriend or a guy friend? It is unclear. Hoping to read more :)
  • ravenouswriterA couple of grammatical errors which really stand out, a lot of dialogue. Overall pretty good but I'd recommend a little more thematic layout and description
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