Two minds, one soul

by
Little miss punk
  • Published:
    19 Jul 12
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Blurb You don't chose a dragon a dragon choses you and once you have been chosen your are bound to your dragon for life. Only the witches who are still one with the old ways are chosen. They came from a distant world and they have taken over; the only ones who can stop then are the dragon riders so they belive if they find out why they are chosen they can. Morgan is one of those witches and one night she is and a friend are both taken. One night they try to make their escape but things don't go to plan.
Approx 30 minutes to read


Two minds, one soul

3. Caged

 

I wake up this time and I'm fully alert; I'am lying on a camp bed but that not what catches my attention is the bars, the bars of a cage. It is tall enough to stand in, wide enough for two beds and just long enough to pace in, we're not an animals but I guess that doesn't matter to them.

 

I look around the dark room to see if there is any one else is here and I spot someone else in the cage next to ours but I think they're asleep. Instead of being filled with despare or sorrow, I'am filled with rage; I can feel a fiery rage running through my veins. Gabe is lying fast asleep in his bed and he looks so peacfull but I he won't be when he wakes up.

 

"If your so powerfull come and prove it!" I shout.

"Don't do that" a voice hisses at me.

"COWARDS!; come and fight me!" I shout on the edge of hysteria.

"Don't say that; it will just get you into more trouble" he says despratly.

"Are you a dragon rider?" I ask trying to calm down.

 

"Yes, are you?; is that why you here?" he ask reminding me of my brother.

"Yes, no; maybe, I don't know" I say starting to sob

"Calm down, I have a plan we can all escape".

"You have a plan?".

"Of course I have a plan.

"What do I do?".

 

"Get a key from an member of staf".

"Then what happens next".

"Just worry about the key for now".

"I'm Morgan; that is Gabe".

 

"Its nice to meet you Morgan; I'm Xaiver by the way".

"Its nice to meet you too".

"You should get some sleep, real sleep".

"Okay".

 

This escape plan what ever it is will probably fail and get us all killed but we have to to try; it gives me hope and if I don't have hope what do I have. I wonder if bree has noticed that we're missing she probably has and she's worried out of her mind but that won't help.

 

She has been so paranoid ever since my brother disapeard a few years back and we haven't heard from him since so we can noly asume he is dead. Now that I think about it I'm really tired so I should get some sleep if I'm going to help him with his escape plan. I curl up in the camp bed, I fall asleep quickly and if I dream I don't remember my dreams.

 

 

 

 

 

Comments (3)

  • Inkball :DJust read the first chapter. A great start- you have explained the characters and setting very well. However, the dialogue is confusing- it would be much better if you actually said which character was saying what, and added some description of how they were saying it and how they were acting as they said it. For instance: "but it's dangerous," Bree said, an anxious look on her face. See? You also have a few grammar mistakes, but other than that, lovely start. And if you have time, can you take a read of my entry, The Lioness and the Squirrel? Thanks. :)
  • Elizabeth HaleI love the idea of a dragon choosing you, its kind of... sentimental.... if that is the right word. I do think that there is a lot of dialouge, which is a bit confusing, and it would be helpfulto start out knowing your characters, which can be expressed through dialouge. Run through the piece and check over for the grammatical issues, including 'boy friend'. Is that a boyfriend or a guy friend? It is unclear. Hoping to read more :)
  • ravenouswriterA couple of grammatical errors which really stand out, a lot of dialogue. Overall pretty good but I'd recommend a little more thematic layout and description
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