A Treasured Tale Never To Be Told

by
4ღℯℓ1ℯ ✰
+ like 11
  • Published:
    30 Jul 12
  • On 5 favourite lists
  • 1162 views
Blurb This story is for the fantasy competition. It is an experiment so please tell me if it works!:D

Plot keywords:
chapter,  ice,  book,  word,  fire
Category:
Fantasy
Approx 4 minutes to read

A Treasured Tale Never To Be Told

1. Fire

 

This is a chapter revolving around a word. And that word is... fire.

His hair fizzed like a crackling fire. Shimmering strands cascaded down his back, vibrating with energy like a lions mane. Humans always associate fire with the colour red; and part of his outfit was- but it bedecked many other hues. From the purest ivory spirals, to flecks of navy blue, to the darkest, deadliest black streaks. The final effect appeared like a firework display against the velvet night. The luminous jewels on his splendid crown and dark boots, flickered- casting shadows on the floor. His vast wings were decorated with thousands of minute feathers, the colour of the sun and stars. His powerful frame seemed to be burnt slightly, and now was the shade of singed honey. His muscles rippled like waves of flame. The features on his face were flawlessly drawn out, with high cheekbones and full crimson lips. But the moment one glanced at him, their eyes were automatically locked onto his. For they say eyes are the windows to the soul. His certainly gave that impression, as they appeared to be filled with a seething pool of molten lava- framed by his thick coal-black eyelashes and arched brows. 

Despite its best efforts, the facade of power and luminosity failed to conceal the fury which he emitted. For his heart had been scorched into charcoal.

This is the Emperor of Fire.

 

Comments (11)

  • Breaking PointOh my. This is epic. I love how you've found something that is unique and timeless as this. You should continue it because this is something precious and you should hold onto it. I love your style, it's mythical and magical aswell. Ths could be a lost and forgotten classic but it will never be lost or forgotten because nobody will be able to forget the magic they found within it.
  • Daniel JohnsonIntriguing and very orginal (well, from what I know at least). i agree with Sapphire, great concept and it absolutely works. Please keep going, i love it.
  • SaffyreThis is really inspiring, i love the concept, it's different and it works really well. Your description is stunning and i can't wait to know what happens next! Keep writing :)
    Also, could you have a look at my movella 'Soul of Flames' if you have time? I'd really appreciate some constructive criticism, thanx :)
  • ChetnaOh. My. God. This is super awesome!!!! The description...I'm in love with it! :DDD WRITEMOREWRITEMOREWRITEMORE PLEAAAAAAASE!! :P I hope you do well in the comp :D
    PS especially love the third chapter, the thing about the story being different for everyone...awesome! Love the cover too :D
  • totorolover33Wow, this is really nicely written, and I loved the chapter structure :) Liking this!
    totorolover33And good luck in the comp!
By continuing to use the site, you agree to the use of cookies. You can find out more by following this link.
Ok