DreamCatcher

by
stevie14
  • Published:
    9 Jul 12
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Blurb Beat Girl fanfiction from the perspective of both Amy and Steve. From the day they first met at London's Design College they've had a bond, a link that ties them to not only the fashion world, but to each other aswell. They decide to become a team, but not everything is as easy as they want it to be. There will be struggles...but it's time for them to catch their dreams.
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Category:
Fan Fiction
Rating:
Approx 13 minutes to read


DreamCatcher

1. Instant Click

Amy

Usually it's one thing about a person that singles them out from the crowd. Maybe it's their hair or a particular piece of clothing they are wearing.

But not this boy.

Everything about him screamed unique in a confusingly subtle way. It was almost as if he had just woken up this morning and thrown on the first things he got his hands on. But the funny thing was...it worked.

The whole outfit just tied together, giving the boy a whole 'I don't care' vibe.

I looked around, taking in everyones thoughts on the boy. Nearly every eye was on him, but he didn't seem to notice.

A small bubble of respect formed in me for this guy. He was someone who was so happy and easy going that he didn't care what people thought of him. He just let go and lived his life without a care in the world.

No one was making any attempt to talk to him. It's like his over-confident personality was steering them away.

I don't think anyone noticed but me, but there was a slight waver in his footsteps. Part of him was beginning to feel conscious of the eyes following his every move.

Personally I think he shouldn't have been even a smidge worried.

I got up and made my way confidently over to him, my long grey cardigan and poofy scarf flapping gently in the wind.

He looked partly startled when I stopped in front of him.

Before he could speak I jumped in, my bubbly, even voice rising above the gentle chattering of other people.

"Top three designers?"

His reply was almost instantanious.

"Haider Ackermann, Dries Van Noten and Yohji Jamamoto."

I nodded and a smile slowly spread on my face. It was like he had picked my favourite designers right out of my own head.

"Good choice." My smile brightened and he returned it with one of his own.

"Thankyou."

"I'm Amy. What have you got next?" I asked. I was curious to see if our interests continued in subjects.

"Fashion History and Culture." He smiled. "Oh and I'm Steve."

I looked at his timetable as he held it out to me.

"We have Fashion Illustration, Fashion Design and Tailoring together." I smiled and he returned it warmly.

"Good at least i'll know someone."

I nodded. "I'll meet you here at half 12 so we can walk to Design together." I started to walk away but turned at the last minute. "And I love your outfit by the way. It's really unique."

As I walked I looked round to see many pairs of eyes looking at me. But the moment I met them, the eyes turned away.

I smiled to myself.

I had a good feeling about Steve.

 

Comments (11)

  • inkpencil...;)This is really good!

    There are a couple of typos, and make sure that every "I" you write is capitalized. That detracted me from the story.

    I would recommend (I hope I'm not too late... I only just saw your comment on the beat girl comp asking for people to read) going into more detail. Your paragraphs are really small. There is a lot of dialogue in this, which serves to speed up the story; however, at some points, it feels like the story is going a bit too fast. Maybe add in some description, or some more character thoughts, so we can know how the characters are feeling and relate to them.

    I don't know if you've finished with this, but the ending doesn't feel "right." In stories we normally have varying degrees of tension, where the worse thing to happen to the character comes just before the end, where, most of the time, everything is made good. That doesn't happen here. Instead, I don't think anything bad happens to the characters (totally irrelevant if you haven't finished, and if you haven't I suggest finishing! The comp is over soon!)

    I hope I helped!

    P.S could you check out my entry, "Made to be ripped" and my poem "Stranger I know" (which is seriously short, I promise :D)
    stevie14thanks for the feedback. Nope the story isnt finished, i just havent had much time to continue it lately :) i'll look over it and attempt to finish it off :) thanks and yup i'll check them out
  • ToryBA very well written peice! I love the way you switch between Steve and Amy's points of view which helps you get to know the characters better! Good luck with the competition!
    ToryBIf you can look at my story I've entered for the competition I'd appricate it! Its called, 'Two decaf coffees and Two extra large chocolate doughnuts'. Thank you!
    stevie14thanks and yup i look at it now :)
  • Alix This is sooo good so far! I'm not kidding, I've actually enjoyed every minute! All your movellas are fantastic :D I was a bit disappointed to find out Steve is gay- I wanted him and Amy to be together! I especially loved the opening :) Please write more soon!
    stevie14yeah i would have liked to write them as in love but in beat girl steve is gay with a boyfriend and cause its fan fiction i thought i should stick to it :) but thanks :)
    Alix Yeah, I wouldn't have been able to resist temptation :P and you're welcome, it's a great movella!
  • Diego<3This was good. One seriously small error lol i'm should be I'm xDDD but this was amazing :DD 'On the "oh and I'm Steve" bit lol love this... Great start
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