Dragged Back

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stevie14
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    13 Jun 12
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Blurb Amunet is a spirit of the underworld. Her job is to help spirits find their way to their after-life. In the real world she doesn't exist, which is why she's so confused when a boy sees her. And tries to contact her. And turns her human...
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Paranormal & Supernatural
Rating:
Approx 1 hours to read


Dragged Back

1. Chapter 1

I sat on the tombstone, my head resting in my hands.

Honestly, I just wanted the dead person to hurry up and rise from their grave. The waiting around was boring.

I looked around at the mourners in sympathy. I had seen enough death to know it affected the people close to the deceased greatly.

One woman was sobbing into a man's shoulder. They must be the parents.

I had checked the tombstone before I sat down to see who I would be helping to move on. They were a girl called Ellen, age 18.

I sighed. Death was so unfair, especially when it happened to the young.

Ellen's spirit rose from the ground.

I jumped up and rushed over.

"Mum? Dad? What's everyone doing here?" Ellen asked the man and the sobbing woman. "Mum?!"

"They cannot hear you Ellen. You are no longer a part of their world." I said softly.

Ellen looked at me with soft brown eyes. "What are you talking about?"

I smiled sadly. "What do you remember last?"

She looked confused for a moment before answering.

"I was waiting for my boyfriend to pick me up but he was way too late. I figured he'd forgotton about me so I left. But as I was crossing the main road, something happened..." She paused and a frown crossed her face. "I don't remember."

I sighed. "Ellen, you were hit by a car going way over the speed limit. There was nothing the doctors could do. You have passed away and this is your funeral." I watched as she tried to process this. "My name's Amunet. I am here to lead you to the after-life."

Ellen backed away from me. "You're lying. I'm not dead, i'm here talking to you right now!" She looked round at the crowd of mourners. "Mum, Dad, Aunt Sophie, Darran! Look at me! I'm right here, alive!"

I shook my head. This was the hardest part; the accepting.

I reached out a hand as Ellen broke into sobs.

"Come on Ellen. It's time for your soul to find peace."

I wiped my hand across the air and a shimmering portal appeared.

Holding Ellen's hand I stepped through.

To the underworld.

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Hours later I re-entered the graveyard I had been in with Ellen earlier.

I always returned to the places of the deceased. It gave me a sense of happiness that I had helped someone move on and find peace.

The cool air send a strand of my hair tickling across my cheek.

I brushed it away and continued walking, threading in and out of gravestones, occasionally brushing my hand against them fondly.

A few of the people here I remembered; Jasper, Kayleigh, Marissa, Adam...

I walked over to Ellen's grave and slumped down next to it.

She had been far too young to die. She should have lived a full and happy life, but it had been severed by cruel fate.

I closed my eyes and soaked in the moonlight.

The peacefullness was bliss.

"Who the hell are you and what are you doing by my sisters grave?!"

My eyes snapped open and I jumped up to find myself face to face with a boy.

He had dark, windswept hair and cold brooding eyes that were currently glaring at me.

I looked left and right to see who he was talking to. It couldn't be me, humans couldn't see me.

"Yes, you in the floaty dress and muddy boots."

I looked at my boots and replied without thinking.

"You try trudging through graveyards all day, helping the souls of the dead and keep clean boots! I'd like to see you try."

His eyes widened.

"Souls of the dead?"

I turned and ran, opening a portal in front of me as I did.

I ran into the underworld and collapsed the portal before dropping to my knees.

A human had seen me.

And I had spoken to him.

 

Comments (39)

  • Incredible me I luv the story!!! But she dies at the end and I don't like sad endings
  • ChocoholichammyWow!!!! I really love the new chapter!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! The only way I could find to possibly improve it is that you have sead that one of the first things Amunet notices is her surroundings but later on in the chapter you then say that she finally notices her surroundings. But that is the critisism I could humanly find!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Please write more!!!!
    stevie14right thanks i will change that straight away :) and yes there will be more soon
    ChocoholichammyOmg is that the end!!!??? Noooo!!! Still love it though, god I am strange!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
    stevie14yeah that's the end :') it's the longest story i've written so i was worried it was getting too long but thanks :) it really mean a lot to hear you liked it
  • AutumnFyreThis is amazing! I can't believe I have not commented yet! It just shows how you can miss gems like these. The plot is original like always and I am glad to see that you are continuing it and making it a long story like you always do! The vocabulary is not confusing yet not simple and boring. The sentence structure is varied although maybe next time use more different punctuation marks. Great job! :-D P.S Please have a look at my new story,
    Here is the link if you have time :movellas.com/book/read/20120724165246425..
    stevie14thanks :) and sure, i'll look at it now :)
  • ChocoholichammyYYYYEEEEEESSSSSS!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Another awesome chapter yay!!!!! PLEASE keep writing I am addicted to this!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
    stevie14thankyou very muchly :)
  • QuillFeatherStill loving it, but maybe the whole Connor situation is moving too fast. You should perhaps have made the break up between Amanda and him less smooth and fast. And Amanda wasn't really being that possessive. Her boyfriend had just said he was going to kiss someone else! Nonetheless I am addicted to this and don't intend to miss a word of it.
    stevie14okay thanks, i'll look over it again and change some of it :)
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