The Crusade of Roses

by
J. Bennett
  • Published:
    11 Jun 12
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Blurb During the Cataclysm our forefathers in Gilneas were turned Worgen except for two humans, but now 200 years in the future the only humans left in the world is Aerilyn Selorien and the remaining members of the newly formed alliance,The Rose Crusade. The entire world is populated with only Worgens, wild and no humanity left with-in them. Silas the new leader of this Worgen population wants to make sure the whole population of humans and any other race is gone and only Worgens live. What he doesn't know is Aerilyn is enraged and is determined to leave him only a corpse when she's done with him.

Approx 8 minutes to read

The Crusade of Roses

1. The Rose Crusade

Aerilyn noticed that morning that all of her supplies eerily vanished from her backpack except for some stormwind brie and some frostweave bandages scattered across the floor. Next to her open bag lead a trail of bread crumbs, like something, or someone took off with her supplies. She stood equipping her bow and followed the path of crumbs till it lead to a small building. The door was partially cracked open and she could hear faint breathing coming from within. As she entered she noticed she wasn't alone anymore. Around here stood a group of humans like herself, and on the table laid her supplies.

"Greetings." She spoke to the child infront of her. As she bowed with great empathy the child raised her firearm with her pudgy little arms and growled.

"How dare you speak to me in such a tone!" Her thin blond hair seemed to have acted with her rage as it started to turn black.

"Sylvia! Leave the poor girl alone, she looks starving." A plump woman with gray mahogany streaked hair spoke eying Sylvia with what appeared to be a glass eye.

"But ma! She's the gal i looted in her sleep!" Sylvia hissed.

"Well we're caught, but least we can recruit a new member to the crusade." The woman replied.

"The Crusade?" Aerilyn peered over at her in utter curiosity.

"The Rose Crusade is what she's gettin' at" Shouted a man about the woman's age in the back of the room.

"Well you seem fit enough but you need some food and armor dearie." She examined Aerilyn from a distance.

"By the way, my name is Amelia Wilkins." She spoke peering at Aerilyn's scratched covered body."

"What in the name of Azeroth happened to you?"

"Worgens that's what." Aerilyn scowled at her wounds.

"Oh dearie im surprised you haven't any infections, anyways we need to clean you up and dress your wounds, and while were at it we must get some food in you! You're skin and bones!"

"Sylvia! Find some clothes to fit miss..." She paused.

"What is your name?" She peered at Aerilyn.

"Aerilyn." She shouted continuing her command with Sylvia.

Sylvia glared back at Aerilyn like a perfectly wrapped birthday present after finding out that it's not hers and all she gets is a sack of beans.

"I can tell we will be good friends." Aerilyn muttered sarcastically catching Sylvia's gaze.

"Now sweetie we will get you suited up and you can decide if you would like to join the Crusade." She smiled as Aerilyn nodded, but really Aerilyn was thinking of a while different idea, she wasn't planning on really joining the Crusade, she just wanted her stuff back and gather more supplies and get the heck out of dodge.

 

 

 

Comments (5)

  • Peter QuinnThe reason I am going to be very picky here is because I want your story to your flawless, and the devs ecstatic with your winning story. It's because I care, not because I want to cause trouble.

    Chapter 1 Mistakes:
    "Greetings." She spoke to the child infront of her. **In front, not infront**
    "But ma! She's the gal i looted in my sleep!" Sylvia hissed. **I, not i**

    Chapter 2 Mistakes:
    "Dear, we need to fatten you up, I'll make you some chicken and i'll bring you something better to drink besides water." **I'll, not i'll, but the second I'll is better left out anyway** **than is probably better than besides**
    She peered over at him and he just ushered for her to be quiet as a very tall woman, perhaps night elf decent rushed into the room with a broom and pan sweeping up all the shards and then as fast as she came she was gone. **perhaps a night elf descendant, not perhaps night elf decent**
    "So i'm assuming it's not just for looks and it actually does something." She smirked. **I'm, not i'm**
    "Well i have to go before they know I was here and by the way that girl Sylvia should be running down stairs screaming her fat head of hers off in about.." **I, not i** **downstairs, not down stairs**

    You also might want to add a lot more commas. But overall, I love it, it looks great! You're a natural, I cant wait for more!
    Peter QuinnI misread on one of those, for the night elf one it's perhaps night elf descent, not perhaps a night elf descendant.
  • Elizabeth HaleI can't really comment on this story because you have only published one sentence. I would reccomend you do at least a paragraph per chapter to give your readers something more to.... Uh.... Read. The story idea does look interesting though, so I can't wait to read more. :)
    J. BennettI just added alot to the first chapter, i didn't mean to publish the first chapter, the first chapter is now complete now, please tell me how you like it. I would love to get some feedback as a 14 year old writter.
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