The Legion

by
NinjaDino
  • Published:
    5 May 12
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Blurb I'm the last of my kind.. My ancestors put away a daemon for centuries, he escaped once but I stopped that.. until now.. My blood will release him, but can I destroy the wargate before I fall for him again?

Plot keywords:
wargate,  demons,  chaos,  death,  daemons,  blood,  evil
Category:
Fantasy
Approx 3 minutes to read

The Legion

1. The Blood of an Immortal

 

It was dark, I couldn’t see anything because I had a blindfold covering my eyes but I could hear growling, snarling and jaws clenching shut and opening, fear was gripping my mind as I was being dragged.

I felt something trying to chew my combats, I flexed my leg and smashed my foot in its face, it let out a yelp then clamped its jaws on my leg, pain seared my leg and thigh as I cried out in pain as I instantly recoiled my leg, the brute who was dragging me must of hit the creature because I heard it scamper off whimpering, he started to grumble then curse at it, 

"Bloody mutt" he yanked me to my feet as my wrists were clasped into shackles and brought above my head, it got tied on something above me, it felt like it was something metal, It made clanging sounds when the metal hit it, I heard footsteps crowd around me then it fell silent, a few seconds later I heard a distant voice but it grew louder until I could make out what the person was saying,

".. But no more my brethren, we shall rise to power once again, for after searching for so long we have found our savior, the last of her kind, she will bring this world to ruin!"

It was a voice that sounded fierce; a hand grabbed for the blindfold and ripped it off as warriors around me cheered in a ferocious roar.

The sunlight blinded me for a few seconds before my vision came back, hideous creatures surrounded me, one looked like a hybrid of human and... well.. I don't know what it was, it just looked horrendous, there was one.. just one.. was human looking, he had a scar that lined from his forehead to his left cheek, our eyes met for a few seconds before the leader stood in the way, he grabbed for a ceremonial looking dagger and advanced towards me, he was chanting something under his breath that seemed to make the crowd fall silent and stare with anticipation.

He was a few inches from my face when he brought the dagger to my arm and started to cut a line down my arm, pain spread through my right arm, blood started to trickle down, a wide grin spread across his face and he turned around to face the crowd and walked to a stone with etchings on it, it read;

"From the ground he rises, from the earth he brings death and destruction upon the sleeping mortals."

He stood in front of the stone and yelled out towards the crowd,

"And now.. He is REBORN!"

He plummeted the blood stained dagger into a crack of the stone as a burst of power shot up my body; Anger, Chaos, Pain, Fear - Everything was happening to quickly, the clearing ripped open as a man walked through, his whole aura reeked of death, He looked at me and laughed as I faded into a cold dark embrace.

 

Comments (4)

  • Elizabeth HaleI love the first sentence: it is really gripping and makes the reader wonder. The only problem is that there are not any periods in the first paragraph and it appears to be one big run-on sentence. Story-wise, it seems really strong, and I can't wait to read more! :D To expand this chapter, maybe go into how the main character is feeling besides pain: is she scared, anxious, annoyed? Does she know where she is? Ect. Please write more!!!!!! :D
    NinjaDinoEdited it slightly with the feelings, tried to break the first paragraph up but not so great with the grammar at the moment XD
    DragonSoulJessI agree with Elizabeth - amazing opening, but you do need to brake up the work... Still eopic tho! U HAV to rite moor now! Cood u check out my movella 'the winged ones' Thanx!
  • LottsOh my goodness, I really love this!!! Please write some more quickly!!! but could you have a look at my story, Mermaid's Breath please? Again, this is a really amazing opening, I can't wait to find out what happens next!
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