Desire
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- SahaanaK & ♥MiaFlora♥+ like 7
Blurb Story of Arrianna Lynn and how she is in the night world and a VAMPIRE!!!
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ClearSkiesI suggest more description but otherwise this is great! Maybe later in the story you could have flashbacks to when she became a vampire... Maybe something happened that caused her mind to supress her memories because she wanted to forgot how it happened... :P If you have time could you check out my movella: February 14th? movellas.com/book/read/20120804024740562.. I'd love some feedback/suggestion/creative criticism from you. But be sure to update this first! :D- 3 months ago
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- lupus virgoGreat story!!!!Please write more!!!!
- 11 months ago
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- AutumnFyreI agree with 4mel1e. More description is needed but I like the way you have instantly started the story with action. Well done! :-D Please have a look at my movella "Differences Collide" as I would love to know what you think of it!
- 1 years ago
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♥MiaFlora♥thank you- 11 months ago
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- 4ღℯℓ1ℯ ✰Thats really good!
When you are writing about emotions try to show them rather than tell them:)
e.g. 1. She was happy 2. A huge grin split across her glowing face while her eyes twinkled like mini moons.
see the difference? I hope you don't find this comment offensive because otherwise your movella is amazing!:)
Please check out my movella Unlike Me, thanks:D- 1 years ago
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♥MiaFlora♥thanks- 1 years ago
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- RavenGirlAWSOME with an extra cherry of WOWSERS.
- 1 years ago
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♥MiaFlora♥thank you- 1 years ago
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CrazyCatChloë xx
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